• Sai Somsphet@lemmy.zip
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          1 year ago

          Goblins in general? Or her people in the sense of the people following the same religion?

          Or her people as in the gang of folks she happens to be traveling with?

          • Ahdok@ttrpg.networkOP
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            In this case, Goblins in general.

            We’re playing in a fairly standard Forgotten Realms, where all goblins are beholden to Maglubiyet as the “one goblin god”, as mostly laid out in VGtM. I wrote some extended canon about why this came to be, and about some of the teachings and faith of Maglubiyet (to fill out for our storytelling) - but in FR as standard, Goblins can’t worship other gods - other gods don’t answer their prayers or awaken priests.

            In our game, Tymora saw an opportunity here to steal a bunch of souls/worshippers away from Maglubiyet, and in the process, gain a bunch of power for herself. Nothing in the gods’ compact explicitly says they can’t take goblin worshippers, it’s just like… a gentlegod’s agreement to ignore them. Konsi’s job is to work within “civilized” society to serve as an example of an altruistic goblin that can “fit in” as well as bring other goblins into the embrace of Tymora.

            At time of writing she’s done well on the first part - goblins are now legal citizens in Waterdeep. On the second, she’s managed to convert about 40 goblins, one of which is an awakened priestess. (Yes, I have a document with all of their names, professions, ages, genders, and personalities.)

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              1 year ago

              With the quotations it seems incredibly like an evil plan in the world,but amazing plot hooks.

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    Have you ever thought about hiring a writer? I love almost everything about your work: the characters, the art style, even the visual qualities of the spoken text!

    But the “story”? Not so much. And I don’t hate it or anything. I just feel like each end panel could be punched up a little. It’s clear you’re going for the classic comic format, but each ending just falls flat a bit.

    Anyway, that’s just my opinion. The only reason I write this at all is I feel your comic could go from good to incredible with just a little writing help. I’m not an expert though, so that’s just my opinion!

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      I have worked with writers before to write comics, and let me tell you, they tend to write about 10x as much text as you can fit into a panel. I once had a professional writer script out a 24-page graphic novel for me, they wrote 10,000 words. Most “writers” are not “comic writers”, and it’s a completely different discipline - there are very very few “professional comic writers” out there, and those that are, are employed full time.

      Trust me. I script comics out first, then I go through several revisions to “punch up the dialogue”, and make it as short as possible. My format is incredibly restrictive, because I’m hand-drawing and hand-lettering everything. Worse, I draw relatively small, this comic fits into an A5 page.

      Lettering is a different skill to writing and drawing in the comics industry, I’m doing all three here. Lettering legibly means that this specific comic sits at the upper end of the wordcount that I can provide. Most of the major webcomics that you’re used to (say xkcd) tend to sit at around 2-5x the number of words per strip as I’m using. OotS tends to sit at about 10-20x the wordcount.

      If you’re talking about story content - I also have a restriction that every comic has to stand alone. People repost my stuff, they see one on twitter or on tumblr, and don’t see the full context of a plot. Some people visit my site once a month, or once a year, and read some of it. This means I have to set up the gag, and deliver it within 4-6 panels. There’s very little room to “write a story” with this gag-a-day format, so therefore actual narrative has to take a backseat to satisfy the medium. While sometimes I’d like it to be, this isn’t a graphic novel, I’m not delivering 500 pages of prose, it’s a webcomic. OotS solves this problem by using 20 panels per comic. I can’t hand-draw that much and post once comic per week, my process is slow

      While I’m not under any illusions that I’m the greatest writer in the universe, I do have a lot of experience with this format, and the majority of people I could “hire” would do a worse job.

      Additionally, out of the three skills you need to make these styles of comics, I know for sure that my art is the weakest of the three - by quite a wide margin. I get far far more abuse and hate-messages about my art than anything else, so telling me that the writing sucks is pretty refreshing.


      Also, I focus-test my scripts with a group of people before I draw them. It takes a LONG time to make these comics in this art-style, it’s a massive time-loss to draw something that isn’t funny or doesn’t make sense, or is confusing. When I make a comic, I storyboard it first, roughly sketch it out, and then show it to a close circle of my friends for suggestions, often if the dialogue is confused or meandering, I rework it.

      All of this is before the fact that I’m generating these stories out of a campaign with my friends, so the content tends to be jokes that happened in a session, or events from those sessions. I’m making it for free, and I’m not selling it as a professional product. “Hiring a writer” and paying them fairly would be prohibitively expensive for something that isn’t intended to generate revenue, if it were even possible to find one who’d be interested.

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        Hey for whatever it’s worth while that person is entitled to their opinion I quite like how you’re doing things as you are. Thanks for creating and sharing.

    • ✨Abigail Watson✨@lemmy.blahaj.zone
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      I highly disagree. You can’t expect every comic to be top shelf, especially if you’re getting it for free. OP has been improving with every post - because they’re gaining experience with practice. Hiring a writer (with what money?) would undermine their own growth. You’re welcome to read more polished comics (like The Weekly Roll), but remember that people dont magically spring up with skill in art and writing right out of the gate. Not to mention that once someone starts making “professional level” work it’s either paywalled or lower priority than paying work.

      Constructive criticism also isn’t “just stop doing that”. You need to give actionable advice. For example, I always recommend new comic creators pick up the Understanding Comics/Making Comics/Reinventing Comics trilogy by Scott McCloud. They’re textbooks that cover all sorts of writing and illustration techniques.

      I like this story, and it’s certainly better than something I could write or draw. The frequency of updates has been amazing. I’m excited to see where things go.

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      I know you’re trying to help, but do you understand how much negative comments like this tend to stick in a person’s brain? They’re doing their best, and although you intended to be helpful, your intention doesn’t matter much if the outcome is that they feel crappy.

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        He gave constructive criticism. It is not his responsibility to keep someone else’s thoughts healthy.
        Don’t publish things without any sort of disclaimer if you don’t want feedback that is not purely positive.

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          It may be that this feels more sensitive than it is because this is literally a comic about some characters with low senses of self worth who are fretting about other characters being “better” than they are.

          @ahdok, just so you know, I personally didn’t see anything wrong with the writing in this comic. I’m left with a strong sense of RomCom “oh my gosh just talk to each other!” Anticipation. :)